Dot.Kill
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IMDB rating: 4.80 Plot: A vicious serial killer is broadcasting his brutal slayings live on the Internet for all to see, and the only hope to put an end to his voyeuristic killing spree is a morphine-addicted detective in this thriller from Ghost Story director John Irvin. The technologically savvy madman has struck once again, and with each killing, drug-addicted detective Charlie Daines (Armand Assante) is coming one step closer to discovering the killer’s true identity. As the clock on the next murder counts down, Detective Daines realizes that the killer has begun to take his investigation personally. Upon realizing that the hunter has become the hunted, Detective Daines sets out on a desperate mission to find the killer before he himself is slaughtered live on camera for all the world to see. |
Actors: Assante Armand,Marinelli Sonny,Degruttola Raffaello,Townsend Stanley,Nasso Frank,Durran Jason,Schiena Tony,Merchant Jeff,Nicholas Ray,Henson Frank,Cunningham Kieran,Jordan James,Thriller,Horror,
Hey! Can you tell me if what i wrote for a book is good so far?Would you buy?
Saturday Morning
I woke up, to the sound of my alarm clock going off.Did it really have to go off? It’s Saturday for crying out loud! Slowly I hit the snooze button, getting out of bed. I went to my dresser, scanning them for jeans. When i finally found jeans, I looked for a nice, but not too nice, T-shirt. After that, I found a black shirt with red polka dots. After I was changed, I went downstairs to eat breakfast.
"Violet is that you?" My mom said.
"Yeah mom," I answered with a sigh. I searched the cabinets for something that was actually good to eat. When i finally found out that Fruity Pebbles was the best we had, I made myself a bowl.As I was scarfing down the pebbles and milk, I watched T.V.
"In a hurry?" My mom asked.
"Yeah, I’m going to Rachel’s house to get ready for school." I replied quickly. Rachel have been my friend from first grade.
"Bye Mom!" I said, throwing the bowl into the sink. I heard glass shatter.
"Oops!" I said running out of the house.
"Rachel’s House"
Yeah, Me going over to Rachel’s house was a big lie. I just didnt want to be stuck my house all day, bored as heck. As i opened the car door, I knew I was going to get pulled over for underage driving. I was only 15. So then, I just shut the door and started to walk to Kristen’s house.Kristen’s mom and my mom have been friends since they were kids. So have Kristen and I. Kristen lives a couple of miles from my house.As I was walking to her house, I noticed alot of animals staring at me. I was a little creeped out so I started to run to her house. About 15 minutes later, I was out of breath, knocking on her door.
"Hey– Violet?" Kristen said.
"Yeah, Hey–Can I come in?" I asked, still out of breath.
" Um, Yeah, What’s wrong?" She asked.
"I saw alot of animals staring at me and it creeped me out so I started to run." I said quietly.
"Wanna go 4-wheeling?" Kristen said happily.
" KRISTEN! You know my mom will KILL me!" I said, almost screaming.
" So? My Mom’s at work, and your mom’s not here!" She said.
"True, I guess–"I started to say until she cut me off.
" THEN LETS GO!" she said, excited.I felt like something horrible was going to happen, like someone was going to get hurt.Kristen walked to the shed, where the 4-wheelers were. One was red and black, the other yellow and black. Right then, something didnt feel right.
I have alot more but, I am too lazy to write it right now!! lolz.. Is it good?? 
well, long story short, she gets in a crash. the girl turns 16 and turns into a werewolf..lolzz i didnt type what i wrote.. otherwise, it would be WAY better!! lol
It’s called a Werewolf’s Secret
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green guy | Jan 08, 2010
unless you want your confidence absolutely destroyed don’t put it in P&S
Miss SazzyBear Rawr | Jan 08, 2010
yes i would ^.^
Twich Lover <3 | Jan 08, 2010
im not into books…. more like geology, math and sustainable solutions to energy crisis, etc.. sorry honey !
Barry Schmelly | Jan 08, 2010
You are too detailed. People actually don’t want to know all about the t-shirt and what you did, etc. Take enough time to give some description, but you need to start getting to the action going a little faster.
I wanted to add another thing. You keep bringing up things that don’t follow into something else. Don’t take your time to give somebody a description of something like how you were going to drive the car unless it will be important a few lines later. It just looks like your story isn’t going anywhere and, as people read, they are thinking "Where is this going." So, they’re trying to use details like the animals staring at you to figure out where the story is going; however, you then just skip on to something else, which will lose your reader’s interest. Just learn to build from one thing into another and not skip around.
Princess Purple | Jan 08, 2010
too straight, too simple, you need to fill it up. the way it is now is something on the lines of what you would tell someone, not what you would write. sorry but I would probably get yelled at if I wrote something like that and a teacher saw it
keep working at it though
rocknrolltrekkie | Jan 08, 2010
Maybe you should add a little detail and not jump from one thing to another. The plot’s good, really! Ehh, though you should probably use other words instead of the same ones over and over again. But other than that, it’s fine!
I'm In Your Bento! | Jan 08, 2010
Um.. its amateurish to be honest.
Keep writing though, the only way to get better
is to write!
take some writing workshops,
learn some different techniques,
you’ll get better in no time.
if its something you love, never give up & good luck
twinkling eyes tonight | Jan 08, 2010
OMG i cant even read the whole thing the start has to be quick and interesting not long and BORING
blah blah blah | Jan 08, 2010
yah, i like it!
whats the title of the book? im interested.